nice fist attempt!
First impression: I think it's kinda quiet. Maybe put a compressor or something on the master track? lol
Nice selection of loops, but they need more texture. There were lots of quiet areas. A bit of delay and/or verb can do a lot for a song! :D
Louder bass, plz! I have a subwoofer, and it didn't get a good workout.
I guess overall, work on the mastering. I need to, too. A multiband compressor can do wonders if you use it correctly :)
Keep up the good work,
- Rig