First of all, thanks for your reviews! :D
On to your stuff, now...
I like the bass sound, but it just was too repetitive. Try changing the chord progression up every so often, it keeps people on their toes.
You know what you need? Some swooshing background pads. The whole song is kinda thin, and the one pad I DO hear just doesn't cut it.
Your drums are too straight and predictable. Throw in some crazy drum loops, slice them up, and rearrange them! :D Also, there's a synth that pops in a couple times that's WAY too loud in the mix. Turn it down plz D:
It has potential, it's just those little things all adding up that bring it down. Keep working at it, read what other people are doing, and I recommend picking up a copy of Comupter Music magazine. It's chock full of advice, free synths/effects, and free samples! I learned a lot from it. :)